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I must say, this is a piece that reminds me of vintage times, when days were delicate and held in a more proper manner.

Of course, I mean this in a good way.

I'm a hopeless romantic, and this has definitely piqued my interest into what other literature pieces you are capable of (then again, I'm a literature geek, too).

I should stop rambling; onto your critique. I've seen many romance pieces, and many follow the beat you have here. Everyone expects a happy ending in romance pieces, which is why the 'Originality' section has is rated what it's rated.

You're technique is amazing; I daresay I may just be jealous. As for the impact, I loved how the entire poem flows as well as it does, like a timeline, just climbing to the strongest point of the piece.

Overall, this is a wonderful piece, and I do encourage you to continue to pursue literature. :D
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TinyFurrTails Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey everybody needs a Happy Ending :) thanks Ri ^.^ Always encouraging! I think, if people took away the happy endings... love wouldn't mean so much to us, and girls wouldn't dream of white knights if they were thinking of being heart broken... so for all us dreamers, and all us hopeless romantics, let us cheer, for all the happy endings in the world :) but magnificently encouraging, you know I'll be writing in this contest until I get eliminated or I win darling! :D this is a huge motivator for me and I hope I kick butt, or I go out in the biggest finale world has ever seen.
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Riarri Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely agree with you that everyone deserves a happy ending.
But, reality doesn't think that way. Of course, I'm hopelessly in
unrequited love at the moment (supposedly), and pieces like these
just increase my hope.

Go for it. You'll do great. ^-^
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TinyFurrTails Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you know what? forget happy endings! enjoy being able to love NOW! time you enjoyed wasting was not wasted, who needs hope for later when u can reach out and touch it? shoot for the stars in his eyes, if u still fail ull fall in the rings of his arms :)
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Riarri Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, I wish it was that easy. Although you are quite encouraging.
Unrequited love is my current dilemma (or so I believe; I've never asked).
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TinyFurrTails Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Then you don't know do you? It's better to have loved and lost, than to never loved at all my dear Ri.... go for it, and if he ever comes back around, you show that man you're too good.
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Riarri Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, sometimes I don't think I have enough courage to do that.
However, you are really encouraging, and I really do thank you~
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TinyFurrTails Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes, life makes you realize stuff, like being ballsy. My all time favorite quote from Drop Dead Diva "There's a great world out there, and I wanna grab it by the disco balls" How about that for encouraging? :D
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Riarri Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I don't know, really. ^^;
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